Having written far too many form poems, here’s an unexpurgated squirt of untamed odic pleasure 🙂
The Unforgettable Unremembered
I've long lost the lighted eyes of the earliest girl I kissed The face of my inaugural drop of inhibitions Is in pieces, an oblivious, unbiddable vision. Years later I shuddered as another Pushed me against the fence first, Flipped the zip and found me with her grip What shape were her lips? My birthday beautiful bright breasts Not glimpsed but gifted Beckoned for hourly seconds In this astonishing licence to leer It doesn't get better but it did one new year More than champagne broke bringing busting bursting bubbles in the mouth These first fornicatory fiddles, fabulous failures, perfect pre-emptors and faultless finds fragment and flee All gone gurgling down amnesia's greedy gullet Gauzing to glaucous generality Names and places have been changed But the sweet memorable mangling mystery of the missed! I cannot forget The one who said no or the too beautiful I couldn't even approach The untasted remains I could paint now like a photograph
Good god, I now have the phrase “squirt of odic pleasure” emblazoned on my brain.
I know! I think I prefer my intro to the poem!!
That is one freaking fabulous mouthful! Actually several if I can still count after this!
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I Thank you Mr E of mystery
“gauzing to glaucous generality” – a very rich image. Well done, Panda!
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Very nice write
Panda! I love this poem. The intro, while it squirts, pales in comparison 😉
Thanks Su – I needed the release of freeform! I’ve done a couple of those descending rhyme doodahs, and have a kerielle theme… but sometimes you gotta squirt!
Yes, you do 😉
Panda’s practical penchant for politely proliferating profound poetry and prose so pleasingly… (Okay, sometimes, I try to be too clever!)
I like it BRay, I celebrate your alliterative spontaneity!
Panda is polite, pleasant, and pleasing! Thank you…
Keep squirting Mr. P loved this!
Always plenty of juice left Rambly 😉
unexpurgated squirt — Loved the intro as well but loved the dance down the lane with you.
So glad you could waltz with me 🙂